More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

Many believe that key
workers
such
as Healthcare, Information Technology and Engineering
professionals
are stolen by the rich nations, others are of the opinion that skilled
workers
are leaving their countries basis on
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individual benefits. I believe,
professionals
migrate to different parts of the world for a better life. Lets us through light on the same.
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, there has been a growing media coverage which has had an impressive influence on people's attitude towards the natural movement of
workers
from poor parts of the world.
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,
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months back, an Indian
natonal
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national
new channel published a report on Indian migrants and the number it showed was alarming in millions and the people
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, high tech
professionals
, businessmen families, IT
professionals
and researchers in the field of various sciences. And when interviewed few of them especially from
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field and Sciences, there was a common factor of migration that they are not getting enough wages for their work.
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enough wages, another reason behind the movement of
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workers
to richer parts of the globe is to secure their children's future.
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,
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parents in India are still not able to afford
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education in private schools. It requires
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of money to get the proper education for their kids and
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of course
is not of
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level. Admission
in
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most good private schools in big cities is difficult without a good donation. Based on
this
example it is profoundly evident that many accomplished
professionals
leave their home nations to provide their
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children
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good education without struggling for fundamental things. To conclude from the aforementioned examples, I firmly believe many people move to non-native countries in search
for
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better paychecks and security for their upcoming generation
whihc
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which
is not
avaiable
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available
in their native homes.
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