Some people prefer to save money. Others prefer to use their money on things they will enjoy. What is the best approach towards money? Discuss both side and give your opinion.

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saving
money
is the best way, while others prefer to buy some
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things
thing
or to pay for services which make them happy.
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both sides of
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to
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using
money
. To start with,
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stashing cash can be
good
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approach for
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term due to the fact of
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inflation, crisis or some
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unexpected
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events in the economy. For
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example
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and my friends choose to save
money
in bank deposits when we need to buy some big thing or pay for bills of study or vacation. For
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long term hoarding cash, the best approach
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investments, buying currency or precious metals. It is
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fact that the
richestmen
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richest men
richest
richest man
in the world invest in stocks, real estate and
jewelry
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. At the same time, people who use their
money
on things for their pleasure live a
wonderfuland
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wonderful and
wonderful
happy life. These men prefer to live by one day and don't think about
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cushion. Sometimes people need to relax
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and do
whatever they want without feelings of guilt.
Nevertheless
,
this
approach towards
money
can be
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idea when you have a great amount of
money
, the
avarage
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average
citizen should think about his future and increase in income. We should understand the importance of investment, saving and increasing cash for a good life. In conclusion, I believe that the best way for using
money
is increasing
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amount
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by the different approaches,
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that
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rational saving
money
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great wealth.
However
, we should remember about our wishes and make some gifts for ourselves and live for our pleasure.
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