Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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It is believed that

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punishment of offenders will lead them to proceed

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further

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crimes. In my opinion, there are two main reasons which are believed

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the trigger of

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behavior

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prison

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environment and mindset change of the offenders after their

first

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punishment.

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social environment will strongly affect the

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of someone newly imprisoned. People found that a new prisoner should follow the culture made by

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an older

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member which

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what the new boys should do and how they behave in the

prison

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. Sometimes, there are

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dominations from certain groups of bad

prisoner

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or gang-member which made a

new-comer

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should follow every

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they made. It will affect the mindset of the

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and

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their braveness in

commiting

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committing

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crimes in the future. As the result,

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prison

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ought to make some strict regulations to control the

behavior

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of the prisoners. They must provide frequent positive social activities

such

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environment

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cleaning, art crafting, music festival to avoid too much free time the prisoners have which can lead to some undesired activities.

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, there must be a periodical control for some people who

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already released from

the

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apply

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prison

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. The Authorities should make a list

about

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what kind of activities or jobs that the people have after

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the

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get out

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prison

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will help the authorities to track the ex-prisoner daily activity. In conclusion, we should keep the positive social culture in

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to keep a good mindset and behaviour of the prisoners and control the ex-prisoners activity frequently to reduce the potential of

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crimes.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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4 paragraphs

260 words

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