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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice dressing. Do you agree or disagree?

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The importance of dressing
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an individual in interpreting a person's culture and personality was always debatable which has now become more controversial with many people not supporting the notion.
Choice
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 of clothing depends on personal preferences. In
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essay
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 light will be shed on
agrguments
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arguments
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clothes
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the clothes
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 of a person do not show his
character
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.
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 with, westernisation has influenced
dressing
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the dressing
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choice
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 of everyone over the globe.
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, boys and girls wear similar
clothes
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 like formal suits to
a professional meetings
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a professional meeting
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 are
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first
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choice
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. Nowadays people prefer to wear
clothes
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 according to the place they are visiting. For an instance, an individual from any cultural background will not wear his traditional dress to an interview, he will wear a formal pant-suit to the interview.
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, an individual from any state or culture will wear a neutral piece of clothing
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 of which his culture is not
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 from his
choice
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 of dressing.
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,
clothes
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 available in
market
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the market
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 are
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a fusion
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 of different traditions. The designers mix traditional and western styles to start a new trend.
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, a dress made by mixing different
dedigns
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designs
 makes it difficult to
prefict
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predict
cultural
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the cultural
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 background of an individual wearing it.
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, many tourists while visiting different destinations wear local
clothes
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 but even after wearing those
clothes
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 their
character
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 and personality remain unaffected. On the balance, it is clear that
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character
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the character
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 of an individual is not affected by his dressing while there are several other factors
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 as moral values, ethics and so on which builds
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character
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the character
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 of a person.
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