Some people think that parents have a great influence on their children. Others believe that the media is a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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also
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media
. There is a high influence on the Use synonyms
child
behaviour in both ways. Most people think that Change noun form
child's
parents
can mould their Use synonyms
child
aspects in a good manner. Change noun form
child's
And some
people claim that Correct word choice
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kids'
attitude
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attitudes
is
by the influence of social Wrong verb form
are influenced
media
.I will be illustrating the two viewsUse synonyms
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Firstly
, Nowadays kids are very smart and they always love to spend their time watching TV. As they are attracted towards the television, they think that what the Linking Words
media
shows is correct. Use synonyms
This
will have a huge effect on the toddlers. Linking Words
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States
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are kids who always Unnecessary verb
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see
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watch
Telephone
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the Telephone
, Television
. Observed several things like foul language and talking in school. Correct your spelling
and television
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thought Correct word choice
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that
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is
the right way to behave.
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was
Secondly
, the impact of Linking Words
parents
on Use synonyms
child's
activity is more Correct article usage
a child's
due to
they see their mother from Linking Words
the
small age and most of the things they will learn from them. Correct article usage
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a recent survey Change preposition
apply
studied
that successful professionals are close to their Verb problem
found
parents
. Use synonyms
This
is because they inherently learn moral values, smooth behaviour and respect towards the elderly. They learnt the important lessons to build their career in the most effective way.
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is from
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of
media
, Use synonyms
which
can Correct pronoun usage
apply
eradicate
by the Wrong verb form
be eradicated
parent's
teachings. So I consider the influence of the Change noun form
parents'
parents
is only high when compared with others. As they observe and understand the great learnings from family.Use synonyms
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