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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of house ownership and rented apartments in Briton and Wales from 1918 and 2011. Overall, half of the population in the two cities moved by their own homes between 1981 and 2011. From 1918 to 1961, many people stayed at rented places.
First
 of all, in 1918, the household was accounted for 76% and in 1939 it was dropped by approximately 7%. Consider within 1939 and in 1953, many people were moved on their own accommodation.
In addition
, in 1971, both communities have been disputed the same amount, while it was 50%. From 1981 to 2011, house ownership has been increased gradually, which is reached the top in 2001, It was about 69%.
Moreover
, in 2011, it was declined by about reached 64%.
Finally
, the number of rented house owners have been dramatically fallen by the following decades, which were reached 2011 about 35%
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 In the end, according to the given chart, many people were moved to their own houses rather than the rented places. Half of the population stayed at their own premises in 2011.
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