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In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are distinct views about the career of
parents
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 after they have
children
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. Whereas some people claim
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 fundamental for
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 to continue their professional lives, others object to that view and argue that it would be detrimental to the development of their kids. I tend to agree with the former because, from my point of view, the money provided when
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 parent works, in some the cases, is essential to sustain the whole family. On the one hand, some individuals believe that when
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 have a job, they have a great opportunity to teach their
children
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 responsible and independent
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, demonstrating it in a practical way.
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, they claim that the budget of the family tends to be more solid and they can allocate the money for better education for their
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, it is widely known that the benefits of having one of the
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 dedicated to the education and growth of
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 are countless
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 since they could monitor the growth of the
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 helping in a variety of
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, the emotional support
children
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 and
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 need must come from their
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, whom they find support and principle, rather than from others. As far as I am concerned, the family which is compost of
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 who work outside the home tends to be more supportive of each other.
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, every family member could be responsible for doing a household chore, and
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little detail might be essential in teaching
children
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 some of
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 for living in
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 when they become
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, if the family has enough income, they could spend part of the money providing memorable family moments,
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 as eating out or travelling together. To sum up, in my opinion, when
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 decide to go out to work, they are not necessarily abstaining from their responsibilities of raising their
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 of the time, they had made
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 decision planning the education of their
children
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income households
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • emotional well-being
  • parental involvement
  • social development
  • extracurricular activities
  • childcare solutions
  • time management
  • career advancement
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