In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There are distinct views about the career of

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after they have

children

. Whereas some people claim

that is

fundamental for

parents

to continue their professional lives, others object to that view and argue that it would be detrimental to the development of their kids. I tend to agree with the former because, from my point of view, the money provided when

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parent works, in some the cases, is essential to sustain the whole family. On the one hand, some individuals believe that when

parents

have a job, they have a great opportunity to teach their

children

responsible and independent

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, demonstrating it in a practical way.

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, they claim that the budget of the family tends to be more solid and they can allocate the money for better education for their

children

.

On the other hand

, it is widely known that the benefits of having one of the

parents

dedicated to the education and growth of

children

are countless

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since they could monitor the growth of the

children

helping in a variety of

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Moreover

, the emotional support

children

and

adolescent

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need must come from their

parents

, whom they find support and principle, rather than from others. As far as I am concerned, the family which is compost of

parents

who work outside the home tends to be more supportive of each other.

For instance

, every family member could be responsible for doing a household chore, and

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little detail might be essential in teaching

children

some of

values

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for living in

society

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when they become

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Furthermore

, if the family has enough income, they could spend part of the money providing memorable family moments,

such

as eating out or travelling together. To sum up, in my opinion, when

parents

decide to go out to work, they are not necessarily abstaining from their responsibilities of raising their

children

,

on the contrary

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of the time, they had made

this

decision planning the education of their

children

.