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Some people say that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementary school such as reading, writing and math. How far do you agree or disagree?

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There are several opinions about
Computer
 intelligence that should be added to become a primary subject in elementary schools
such
 as math, reading and writing. Overall I strongly agree that
computer
 skill is very important to pupils in
this
 revolutionary 4.0 era. Today, the revolution industry 4.0 has begun to develop our earth. People in
this
 term should know and not be blind about Information technology, especially
computer
 skills.
However
 many regions in the world are not ready with the sophisticated stage. Not only children can not operate the
computer
 but
also
 many adults around the world can not understand how the
computers
 work.
Furthermore
, the modern age makes us grow rapidly with the technology which uses
computers
 for the premier communication to each other. And the government has made a new decision about national examinations that must use a
computer
 as a tool for the examination. Despite
this
,
computers
 will help almost all of our lives, especially our job. Either pupil can practice a
computer
 to help with their task or just handling it to learn other subjects with an ebook that can be read by the
computer
.
Computer
 skill was needed for all generations in the world to operate several things that help people to make the effort easier. In conclusion, I think
computer
 expertise is very important for the student to communicate in
this
 modern generation. Not only about reading, writing and math which make learners smart in school, but
also
computer
 intelligence can make children smarter when they operate
computers
 to help them study.
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