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Some people think that museums’ main function is to educate people, the others suggest that they can also serve for entertainment purposes. What is your opinion?

Some people share a perspective that
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 main function is to educate people and
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 because a visit to the
antheneum
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atheneum
 can enlighten folks with
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 and broaden their horizons. In comparison, others suggest that they can serve for entertainment purposes which is because these areas can be pretty perfect for fun family outings. In the essay, I will discuss
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both
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 of
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. In my opinion, I believe museums have immense educational values plus a visit to these places can be entertaining as well.
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mostly
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 folks have an understanding that depositories are to
enlihghten
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enlighten
 humans with historical
knowledge
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 of different eras or territories or information about other various stuff. To illustrate,
antheneums
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atheneum
 exist on topics like art, history, geography, science, textiles, space, cars, architecture and many more. And a trip to these places can help us gather a
pletora
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plethora
 of
knowledge
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. Practical
knowledge
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 has always proven to be more beneficial for students than academic books.
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, for these reasons some take exhibition studios only as a site for learning.
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, they argue that there are other locations for amusement like parks, movie theatres, shopping malls etc.
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 why go to an
antheneum
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anthem
 for enjoyment purposes.
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, there are others who feel exhibition studios are solely for enjoyment.
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, there are individuals who go to these locations with family or friends to spend quality
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 and do stuff like chatting around or taking pictures. They do not consider the opportunity of learning that comes along with it. They share a
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 that there are sites for studying like schools, colleges, libraries
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 why go to a depository for pleasure. To conclude, I hold the view that museums are for both enjoyment and education. To put it more simply, the public can go on a tour with their families and friends for fun and quality time but at the same
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 they can gather
knowledge
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 about countless
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staff
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 present there. It is a site for both recreation and learning.
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, it would be a complete waste if individuals take advantage of only one side.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tangible connection
  • historical artifacts
  • multimedia presentations
  • hands-on learning
  • ignite curiosity
  • cultural significance
  • interactive exhibits
  • engaging workshops
  • adapt to diverse audience
  • traditional education means
  • tourist attraction
  • local economy
  • educational institutions
  • entertainment value
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