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In some countries, boys and girls are educated in different schools rather than in the same school. What are the advantages and disadvantage of this?

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In many countries, they prefer to study different genders in different schools rather than one
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 for boys and girls provide them with a safe environment. To explicate
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 situation, they have a secure environment because they can not distract or indulge in
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 affairs. Which help them to achieve their desire goals.
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, girls may have a much safe environment for studying as well as they can
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 participate in sports.
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, they can
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 seek many other career options
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 as painting,music and many more.
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,when students studying in one
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school
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 they have many possibilities to fulfil their dreams. As well as, they can get a good college or university in future through which they pursue their future studies. But
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 studying in single-
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school
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 have disadvantages
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 as a person
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 not well socialized. To articulate
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, after persuing their studies when they indulge in jobs.Where they find both genders. They get hesitate to talk to their opposite
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 because they never indulge in these talks from their childhood. Whereas, they may find it difficult to work in that community as well as they can not give their best in their work.
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,
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 will lead to a lack in their skills.
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, many studies show that if a person does not find a suitable workplace for themselves.
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 their development stops in that field because they are unable to talk to any opposite
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 and does not seek
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help.Whereas, if they study in mixed schools they can easily communicate with other
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 and ask for support.
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, they can work easily without involving in any affairs. To conclude, learning in a single-
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 have fewer distractions.
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, they lack in social activities
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 as working with other
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 or while commuting with the opposite
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