some people think people working in creative arts should be financially supported by the government. Others think they should find financial support from other resources. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In a contemporary

world

, Few believe that the artwork should be funded by authorities. While

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some like to find their own sponsors. In

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both views are described including my opinion

However

, To maintain culture and for beautification of society. artists play a vital in

this

task and the

goverment

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government

should support their endeavours. In our communities people consider

this

as a hobby ,not as a passion because as their less validity of jobs along with money as a consequences rulers should take initiative and start to arrange vacancies for them and make essential subject in schools.

Furthermore

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depends on their

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and of course their earing.

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everyone has enough money to spend on flicks no one wants to buy a ticket for their exhibitions and

hence

the government should organize the seminar which would free cost and where encourage all of them To put

in other words

, By use of technology and by connecting with some social activists. They can take their place and as well as earn money.

Firstly

, it is a

world

of social media where they can post their creativity and develop their own shop without any huge investment

For example

, on Facebook lots of people make their pages and selling their products successfully.

Secondly

,

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there are lots of organizations through which generation providing help for needy ones, it could be argued that for

this

they require artists to join volunteers. For an instance, There are a lot

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who worked for the welfare of offspring for them crafters always require to develop their interset In my opinion,

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that there should be an approach. where they can lead without any obstruction but nowadays, to show your talents in the front of

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can be done by themselves with help of internet. In conclusion, It is true to develop a country

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of talent

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but its

also

true that to for the beautification of the

world

or to pass our history for the new generation, the designer plays a vital role. So that either governments or some other profitable and non-profitable organization should enlight their talents