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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

#people #home #countries
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The amount of
people
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 performing remotely from their homes has been increasing recently. While some employees are satisfied with the fact, that they can operate online, others still prefer commuting to the
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.
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 essay will discuss both points of view on
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 phenomenon. On the one hand, working from home has many benefits. Not commuting to the
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 daily lowers the use of fossil fuels, which leads to
better
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a better
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 ecological
situtation
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situation
 in the city. Many persons
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 emphasize the fact, that
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they
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 stress levels are much lower which is something, the whole family benefits
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,
people
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 who work remotely are able to create their own working plan and can choose the pace
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 they
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feel
 comfortable
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. They can,
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, start fulfilling their duties earlier in the
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morning
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 and have free afternoons, which they can spend with their families.
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,
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opponents
 argue that the work-life balance is disrupted. The reason is, that many
people
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 are not able to draw the line between their family and work life. Employees often tend to postpone their duties, which affects the whole family negatively, because
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 are
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 forced to work in the evenings while the kids are at home and are seeking their parent's attention.
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 are
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 sociable
livinig
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living
 creatures, working alone from home might lead to worse mental health.
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 survey in the United
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 showed, that
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 working remotely for more than a year feel
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extremely
 uncomfortable when they have to attend a meeting in person. In conclusion, while relocating
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 hours online definitely lowers the carbon footprint and might be an advantage for some
people
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 who are able to always meet the deadline, there is still
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 proportion of
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 who are lost without
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a strict
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 schedule which working in the
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 offers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • flexibility
  • commuting
  • work-life balance
  • autonomy
  • productivity
  • focus
  • job opportunities
  • social interaction
  • isolation
  • boundaries
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • resources
  • support
  • sedentary
  • physically active
  • responsibilities
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