The movement of people from villages to cities for work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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many years mankind
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shifted from small towns to metropolitan areas.
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to many threats for both individuals as well as land. These are to be highlighted in the upcoming paragraphs along with
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towards
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this
problem. To kick the discussion there exists
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of reasons standing in favour that migration of people leads to
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serious issues.
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and foremost of them is overpopulation in urban areas due to
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of individuals.
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thousands of people move to
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for
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settlement.
In addition
to
this
inflation rate arises in these areas, meaning
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that prices of product /services consumed due to excess demand. With the effect of
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problem society hits with another major trouble named
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`Scarcity of resources ´.
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affecting the price of regular
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related
products. Synergic efforts
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to be carried
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concerned bodies to ameliorate the circumstances borne out by
this
issue. Primarily higher authorities must encourage rural people to stay in
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. To elaborate government
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need
needs
to carve out more facilities and good development in villages as well as
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transportation. Another measure to
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threat is building infrastructure or factor outlets in order to have better employment facilities. Unlike Tasmania, one of the
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or Australia having
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job rates and major population trends to move from that particular part.
This
, after analyzing the given issue it can be concluded that it is almost important to tackle
this
problem and make
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more developed and
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synchronized
synchronised
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mankind
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living there. With the advancement in agricultural land that ultimately feeds the whole nation.
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