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Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#topic #people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
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According to some
people
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,
media
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 treat
celebrities
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 unfairly by invading
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their private
life
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. Others opine that
this
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privacy
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 invasion is the price these
people
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 have to pay for being famous. In my opinion, some
media
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interest
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 in the private
life
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 of
celebrities
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 is certainly normal;
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, too much intrusion should be discouraged.
Celebrities
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 themselves post their private
lives
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 on social
media
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. Actually, many of them are desperate to be in the limelight all the time and do not really bother about exposing their private
life
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. In my opinion,
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people
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 have no real right to claim
privacy
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. For famous
people
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, being constantly in
news
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 is part of their job. If they stop getting
media
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 attention, it could even hurt their career prospects.
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, many of them go out of their way to be in
news
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. For
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 reason, it is common for them to flaunt new relationships or hairstyles every other week. For many
celebrities
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 being constantly in and out of relationships or experimenting with new looks is a great way to gather public attention. Since the general public has too much
interest
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 in the personal
lives
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 of
celebrities
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,
media
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 cater to that need by giving celebrity
news
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 and gossip.
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, the argument that
privacy
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 invasion is the price of fame certainly holds some water especially in the case of
attention hungry
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celebrities
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 who just want to see their face plastered all over the visual and print
media
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. Even so,
celebrities
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 are
also
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 human beings and they have aspects of
life
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 they want to keep private. It is not fair for
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media
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the media
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 to write about things that
celebrities
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 themselves want to hide.
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, some of these famous
people
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 are into substance abuse and they may not want
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media
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the media
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 to dig into
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 details.
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, some are in relationships they do not want to flaunt. Some may be going through a painful breakup or depression.
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Media
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 has no right to expose details that
celebrities
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 try too hard to hide. Every human being has a right to
privacy
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.
Celebrities
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 are no different. While the public
interest
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 in their private
life
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 is understandable, it does not give
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media
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the media
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 the licence to post unsavoury details of their private
lives
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. In conclusion,
media
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interest
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 in the private
lives
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 of famous
people
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 is understandable as celebrity
news
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 has a large number of followers. Even so,
excessive
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 intrusion is not acceptable as
celebrities
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 are
also
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 humans and if there are aspects of
life
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 they want to keep private,
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media
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the media
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 has an obligation to respect it. Just because someone is famous does not mean that everything about them should be in the public domain.
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