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The given table compares European
consumptions
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consumption
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 of
milk
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 and
butter
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 according to the aged
group
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 in 2007. Overall, it is readily apparent that youngers consumed more full-fat
milk
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 and
butter
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 compared with the elderly, while the majority of
milk
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 and
butter
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 was purchased by people who were over 45
years
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 old.
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, people who were below 25
years
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 old consumed the least
milk
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 at 1200ml, and 59% of that was full fat in
this
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 year.
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,
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the
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65-year-old
group
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 bought the most
milk
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 at 1900ml with 70% of the low-fat and 30% of the full-fat.
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, the consumption of the
butter
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 showed
the
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a
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 similar trend between the two groups, with quantities of 12g ( below 25
years
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 old) and 30g (over 65
years
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 old).
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 people aged 26-45 and 45-65 purchased 1650ml and 1670ml
milk
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, respectively, while the
later
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latter
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group
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 chose more full-fat products.
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, there was a big difference among the consumptions of the
butter
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 that the figure of
this
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 item in the 45-65 year
group
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( 60g) was about the sum of the other groups.
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