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The given table compares European
consumptions
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consumption
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 of
milk
 and
butter
 according to the aged
group
 in 2007. Overall, it is readily apparent that youngers consumed more full-fat
milk
 and
butter
 compared with the elderly, while the majority of
milk
 and
butter
 was purchased by people who were over 45
years
 old.
First
, people who were below 25
years
 old consumed the least
milk
 at 1200ml, and 59% of that was full fat in
this
 year.
In contrast
,
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the
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65-year-old
group
 bought the most
milk
 at 1900ml with 70% of the low-fat and 30% of the full-fat.
Moreover
, the consumption of the
butter
 showed
the
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 similar trend between the two groups, with quantities of 12g ( below 25
years
 old) and 30g (over 65
years
 old).
Then
 people aged 26-45 and 45-65 purchased 1650ml and 1670ml
milk
, respectively, while the
later
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latter
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group
 chose more full-fat products.
Besides
, there was a big difference among the consumptions of the
butter
 that the figure of
this
 item in the 45-65 year
group
( 60g) was about the sum of the other groups.
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