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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #boys #girls #schools #benefit
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 is one of the communities that everyone has been passed, So you know the community of the
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 is one of the impacts that make your perspective or behaviour. I believe that
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 as separate or integrated
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 has different advantages, which are describing in
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 essay. Nowadays, the community of the mixed
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 has various types of
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 which cause a lot of advantages.
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, the society where you live can be improved your thinking skills to communicate with other
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 that will make it easier to get along with
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 when you grow up.
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, attending mixed
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 maybe got more chance to found the new
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 who have different ideas more than in separate
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.
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, I believe that the integrated
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 has enormous benefits, I agree
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 not every
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 to be great.
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, if they are in the all-boys
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 and they are gay or LGBT, you may not be accepted by the society you live in.
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, separate
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 have a lot of strict rules that cause their student to have a responsibility and easily to control which will make a community go on in the same way.
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, the student can found yourself or interesting more than the mixed
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 because the separate
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 has the same gender that you maybe got more chance to found the
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 who interest in the same things. to conclude, regardless of either separate or integrate
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 have the benefits of themselves but it was shown in different ways, so if you are parents of the children and it can happen, I think it will be the better way to let your children choose your
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 because each
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 has a different society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
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