It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

With advancements in technology, researchers and explorers can now travel to
remote
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the remote
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natural
environment
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environments
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like the South
Pole
. I feel exploring the South
Pole
has more benefits than drawbacks. For one, scientists will get a chance to conduct research on
this
untouched land.
For instance
, they can conduct research on penguins, polar bears, walruses and whales.
Moreover
, they can do experiments to reverse the rise in global temperature which will be a plus point for mankind.
Additionally
, visitors can experience
extreme
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adventures that the South
Pole
has to offer.
Hence
, there are a lot of advantages
in
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visiting the South
Pole
.
However
, along with numerous
advantages
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there are some disadvantages as well.
Firstly
,
presence
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the presence
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of humans will degrade the natural environment of the South
Pole
. People change their
surrounding
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surroundings
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to their own convenience which adversely affects the environment.
For example
, when visitors were
first
allowed in the Amazon Forest for jungle safari, they left plastic bags and bottles there.
Secondly
, in the South
Pole
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basic amenities are not available. People will have to be prepared for all the mishappenings that nature will throw at them.
Finally
, as
temperature
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the temperature
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there is well below 0 degrees,
travelers
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can face serious health problems even if they take extreme precautions. The above look illustrates that though there are a few demerits in exploring the South
Pole
, the merits outweigh them. The research potential and the experience that South
pole
provides to scientist and tourists shadows the drawbacks that
comes
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with it.
Hence
, it is worth exploring the south
pole
.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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