It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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With advancements in technology, researchers and explorers can now travel to
remote
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the remote
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natural
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like the South
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. I feel exploring the South
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has more benefits than drawbacks. For one, scientists will get a chance to conduct research on
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untouched land.
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, they can conduct research on penguins, polar bears, walruses and whales.
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, they can do experiments to reverse the rise in global temperature which will be a plus point for mankind.
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, visitors can experience
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adventures that the South
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has to offer.
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, there are a lot of advantages
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visiting the South
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, along with numerous
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there are some disadvantages as well.
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of humans will degrade the natural environment of the South
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. People change their
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to their own convenience which adversely affects the environment.
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, when visitors were
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allowed in the Amazon Forest for jungle safari, they left plastic bags and bottles there.
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, in the South
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Pole
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basic amenities are not available. People will have to be prepared for all the mishappenings that nature will throw at them.
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, as
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the temperature
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there is well below 0 degrees,
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can face serious health problems even if they take extreme precautions. The above look illustrates that though there are a few demerits in exploring the South
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, the merits outweigh them. The research potential and the experience that South
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provides to scientist and tourists shadows the drawbacks that
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with it.
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, it is worth exploring the south
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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