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Hi! My name is Thu Hien. I am Vietnamese. So write accurately in Vietnamese is Thu Hiên. Sounds weird right!

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Hi! My
name
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 is Thu Hien. I am
Vietnamese
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. So write accurately in
Vietnamese
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 is Thu Hiên. Sounds weird right! My friends
also
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 think so. Honestly, my
name
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 is quite a rate, very few people have the same
name
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 as me. Indeed, I
also
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 do not understand it. But my grandfather, who imagined that
name
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 said there was a meaning behind it. I was born in Can Tho city. When I was 6 years old, my mother moved to a wonderful place, Phu Quoc Island.
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, I have to live there. Currently, I am 16 years old, I have been living here for 10 years. How about my family? My family has 4 members: mother, little brother, and me. My brother is a naughty boy, but sometimes he is quite lovely. I certainly laugh all the time if I stay with him all day. At school, I am a careful and hard-working person. I am eager to learn new things and willing to work in a team. I have a great passion for drawing and playing
guitar
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the guitar
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. Joining guitar club or drawing are what I think about at
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 when I get pressure. The school that I'm attending is a top-tier secondary. I feel
honored
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 for being chosen to study in V.I.P
class
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. My other hobbies including reading books. I intend to take an
English
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class
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 to improve my
English
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 and become the top student in my
class
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 down the road. Have a good day! I’d
like
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 introduce myself. My full
name
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 is Vo Thi Thanh Tuyen, please just call me by my
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name
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 Tuyen. I don’t know what my
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 means,
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however
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 I think it sounds like “money” in
Vietnamese
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. Sounds weird but I fancy it. I’m turning 15
this
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 October. I was born and raised in Phu Quoc where is an island located in the Southwest of Vietnam. I speak fluently in
Vietnamese
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,
English
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 and pick up some Korean words because of watching movies a lot,
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an
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a
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 nhon ha ye so’ is hello. I live with my family including my dad, mom, my eldest brother, sister and me. I prefer to stay at home and do everything with everyone than hang out since it’s exciting and
cozy
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cosy
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. At the present, I’m a student
in
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at
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 Phu Quoc high school. My
class
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 is 10A5 which
the
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class
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 with the highest score in the 10th grade on the entrance exam. My classmates are all good so I’m a bit stressed. When I have some spare time on weekends, I often hang out with my friends, do
something
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some
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 activities like playing badminton and
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, I like to watch films to relax and recharge my batteries. Down the road plans, I will decide to take up a Chinese language since it would be helpful in
everday
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everyday
 life and after entering the formal education, I’ll participate in the competition for excellent students in
English
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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