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In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

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It is no doubt that the family structure of today differs from that of the structure that existed decades ago. Now these changes can be seen even in the role that each member plays and I am of the opinion that these are mostly positive changes The reason for my affirmation that these changes are all positive
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 to a myriad of reasons . Earlier men were considered as the sole
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 of the family and women were constrained to the four walls of the kitchen and considered merely as
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. But now we as a society have reached a stage where both the genders work actively towards bringing a share of income to the house thereby ensuring more financial stability and sharing of duties and responsibilities between both male and female
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 It helps in breaking dangerous stereotypes involving a particular role that a family member has to play .
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 earlier the women of the family were the designated cooks and cleaners of the house , but now with every girl child going to schools and most of the women working
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 their husband , it has made the males realise the need to share the responsibility of getting chores done at home . With each member realising the mutual dependency that they have on each other , it helps to make each
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 more sensitive and understanding of others which can lead to societal harmony and co-operation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income
  • gender roles
  • single-parent households
  • divorce rates
  • same-sex parents
  • multigenerational
  • family dynamics
  • aging population
  • communication technology
  • child-rearing approaches
  • work-life balance
  • remote working
  • family structure
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