In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

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In recent years, there is an ongoing debate about whether the need for curfew should be imposed

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teenagers from going out after a particular time at night unless there is a need. In

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believe the curfew should be implemented in some areas in the US. In today's world with the advancement of

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technology many teenagers are hooked to the social media.

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as Instagram, Facebook, Tik Tok and etc. Through social

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they are able to get connected to any people. In ,addition they are able to make

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to communicate. They tend to get friendships with the wrong groups at times. In another ,

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will encourage them to go out to parties and meeting up with friends at the wrong time which will bring harm to them. We can avoid

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kind of scenario if there is a curfew.

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that, many illegal activities are mostly carried out during late nights.

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, bars and gaming centres. Without realising we may get our kids involved in

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activities. Give them freedom during the day when it's safe for them to be outdoors. In conclusion, the main factors resulting in the problem among teenagers are the ignorance of parents.

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, there are potential solutions that have helped in minimizing

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issue. Parents or guardians have to accompany the young adults if there is a need to go out during late nights. By ,

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we can totally keep away unwanted things from happening.

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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

Fully explain your ideas

In schools and universities, girl tend to choose arts subjects, while boys choose science subjects. What is the reason? Should the trend be changed?

Some people believe that it’s not necessary to have internet access to live a full life. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

Nowadays some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is this the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

Personal experiences in leadership roles, facilitating changes, and mentoring others.