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Some people say that old schoolchildren should learn all the subjects some others think that they should only learn what they are interested in. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are split views about the subject that students learn at
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 level. Some people believe that
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 number of subjects is
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 way to enhance their knowledge whereas another group of thinkers support that studying small amounts of books would be betterment for their future. Both views
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 own pros and cons.
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, before commenting my opinions both the view mus be discussed. Examining the former view, many people opine that having vast knowledge will
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 them to lead their
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, I firmly believe that
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 group of books will
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 a better near or distinct future
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 individuals. To conclude, it is still an individuals choice where they
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 to enhance their career.
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