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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 believe that successful graduation from
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university is the best way to get a dream job.
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 some
people
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 argue, that work experience is more important than a university degree. In the following essay, I would like to evaluate both views and share my own opinion.
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, in many countries all over
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Europe it was believed for decades, that
university
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 diploma is the only way to secure a family for life. Due to the rough history,
people
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 valued the opportunity to study at the college, which led to a significant increase in the number of
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graduets
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graduates
 in the past decade. At
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, governments and companies were thrilled, but it soon turned out, that these
people
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 leave school at the age of 25 and have no experience in the real world. Meanwhile, there suddenly is a lot of well-educated
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, governments of particular countries are facing another problem. There is a lack of experienced workers with certain skills. A strange situation has
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occurred
 recently.
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 who work with their hands suddenly earn more money than those, who studied
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 best business schools.
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