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Television dominates the free time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

#television #time #people
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In the contemporary world, watching television have caught abundant
time
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 from
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's leisure
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.
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 issue may cause them to stay most of their
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 laying in front of the
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 and have no relationship with others in society. Indeed, I absolutely agree with
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 case and even I think it is a problem that we should solve. I strongly disagree with spending most of the
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 watching
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 programs which are not useful anymore, nor educating anything beneficial. Spending far hours seeing
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 programs make individuals as sluggish as performing anything good to improve their
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 or learning to increase in
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 skills.
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, once a person loses most of his or her
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 period via watching television, that one does have not sufficient
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 to catch education by using educational gadgets or attending courses in order to improve his/her knowledge leading to a better
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.
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, wasting most of the daily hours by looking at a
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 screen, avoid to communicate with other
people
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 in the society and make the relationship with our immediate and extended family, even friends and colleagues to increase our social networking which assists us to possess a better
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-style. A case in point is that not having a relationship with others, according to some psychological research, may cause depression to the individual and occurs a plummet in one's
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, and the worst, fall in his or her job.
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 fall in the job, explore their livelihood and make a terrible status in the living situation. In conclusion, watching television is one of the worst ways of wasting
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 which leads
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 to depression due to laziness and having no social connections.
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 issue makes bad occasions on socialism and
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's lifestyle improvement.
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