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Band 8.5

Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have just read an article in an international magazine which contains some incorrect information about your town. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter, • say which points in the article you are in agreement with • explain ways in which your town centre is different from what is stated in the article • provide some interesting local facts about your town Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Hello XYZ, I am referring to the article published in the June edition about the quaint, little town in Uttarakhand named Auli. The author of the article rightly described the beautiful
village
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 and the serene atmosphere but to state that the locals are not welcoming could not be far from the truth. When the author
along with
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 their assistant reached the bus stop near the
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, 4-5 villagers volunteered to carry their heavy bags for them. Once in the
village
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, the team from your magazine was
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 treated to evening tea and dinner. I can go on and on about the hospitality,
however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I would like you to go over the points made in the article and publish a retraction, apologising for the harsh words being mentioned. My
village
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 ranks 15th in terms of the number of graduates in a
village
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 in Uttarakhand and possibly one of the cleanest villages in the state and all of
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 is thanks to the work done by locals for the betterment and upliftment of the place. Do let me know if you would like more pointers, happy to share. I will be waiting for your response. Thank you

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Organization
Consider organizing your thoughts into distinct paragraphs for clearer separation of ideas.
Detail
While the response is clear, ensure that each main point is supported with sufficient detail.
Tone
The tone of the letter is formal yet friendly, suitable for addressing a magazine editor.
Task Achievement
You have effectively addressed the task by identifying points of agreement and disagreement with the article.
Closing
The closing of the letter is courteous, which is appropriate for the context.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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