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Overpopulation in urban area has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problems.

#overpopulation #area #two #ones #government #individuals
The diagram provides information about the process of how the
bricks
 that use for the building industry can be made. Overall, there are seven stages in the process to make it complete, beginning with the digging up of the
clay
 and end up with delivery.
First
 of all, you have to dig up the
clay
 and
then
 put it on the metal grid in which pastes above the roller and mix the
clay
 that has been filtered by the metal grid with sand and water.
Second
, either you put the
clay
 into the mould or the wire cutter, you will get the
bricks
 are the same. for the
next
 step, bake the
bricks
 in the drying oven for 24-48 hours, and
then
 burn them in the furnace at 200-980 celsius, at 870-1300 celsius, respectively. at the end of burning put them into the cooling chamber for 2 or 3 days.
Finally
, the
bricks
 are packed and delivered to their destination.
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