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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world? Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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Travelling is one of the most crucial parts of people's lives. If a question about tourists being the main
income
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 is addressed, it will be challenging for us to make a decision on
this
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 controversial issue. Some people are a firm believer in the main source of
income
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. Others,
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, have always shown intense devotion to creating problems. 
This
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 essay will consider the obvious benefits and the negative effects that could occur. The first and most obvious reason is
the
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that
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income
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 can
distribute
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 through the local community. A good example of
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 can be seen that ,in 1990,
Thai
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the Thai
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 government launched the most successful campaign known as gastodiplomacy. They said the easiest way to win hearts and minds is through the stomach that why Thai cuisine is well known all around the world.
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, many tourists want to come to Thailand to try
thai
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 street food, leading to the local restaurants
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 a
lot
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 of
income
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 from them.
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, the research shows that travellers will spend more than twice on their vacations which can mean that tourism can be the main source of
income
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 driving the GDP of the country.   Despite
being
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 several advantages, tourism
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 has numerous drawbacks, the potential of which is creating pollution. Many tourist attractions create a
lot
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 of waste every day as can be seen in Pattaya which is the most popular place for foreigners in Thailand. There is a
lot
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 of single-use plastic in both the sand and sea
which
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and
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 sea animals were poisoned from
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 trash. The rationale behind
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 is failing to manage the pollution so the government ought to create a campaign to raise awareness of
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 issue. In conclusion,
benefits
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the benefits
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 of travelling outweigh
its
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apply
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this
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 advantage because
tourist
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tourists
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 will bring a
lot
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 of money to use for vacation which can distribute
income
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 to both
city
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the city
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 and
countryside
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the countryside
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.

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task response
Please ensure that your essay directly answers the prompt given. Provide a clear and well-structured argument about whether the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of your ideas and paragraphs. Work on creating a more coherent and cohesive structure by using appropriate linking words and maintaining a logical progression of ideas throughout the essay.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and accurate language to express your ideas. Avoid repetition and strive for a wider variety of expressions.
grammatical range
Pay closer attention to your sentence structures and grammar. Ensure that your sentences are grammatically correct and varied. Work on using a wider range of grammatical structures and tenses.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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