Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that it should become easier for them to study at universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, pupils who live in the countryside hardly receive higher education. Some individuals believe it should be changed.

This

essay strongly agrees with

this

statement. learning is not only the best entranceway to get a job but

also

gives multiple advantages. Undeniable that graduation certificate is not the most important thing in life, tremendous people succeeded without it.

However

, there are some countries that assume and prioritise academic attainment

such

as India, China, Vietnam, and especially Thailand. It is almost impossible for Thai people whose study is below a bachelor's degree to gain a proper job.

Although

the majority of society value literacy but Thai schooling system is always unfavourable and ignore kids from suburban where the prosperity is not extensive.

Moreover

, the competition between seniors, for college ingress, is quite tough and stressful even for learners who live in the capital. It definitely has become harder for provincial students.

Therefore

the way to help these children is not to tell them to improve themselves in order to fit with the country's standard but the system should be changed and adjusted to be available for every person. In conclusion, each kid ought to get a chance to reach an equal discipline and the administration have to remodel in order to be suitable for all the people who come from different conditions.

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Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that it should become easier for them to study at universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

TASK 2 (Academic and General Training) You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? Write at least 250 words.

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everthing organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

Schooling is no more necessary, since more and more information are accessible on the Internet, and student can study just as well at home. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?