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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information

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The
park
 plans
demostrate
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demonstrate
 the earliest form in 1920 and
current
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the current
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 view today. Overall, it is clear that
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the same
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same
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some
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 major changes happened in years. In 1920, Grange
Park
 had
two
 entrances
one
 was in the North and
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second
secon
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the secon
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one
 was in
teh
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the
 South. when someone came from Elden Street which is located in
south
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the south
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 fountain was
on
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 the middle of the
park
. There were
two
 rose gardens between
two
 seating
area
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areas
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one
 of them situated
north west
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north-west
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 and the other in
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south-west
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south
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the south
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 west.
Next
 to the fountain there
as
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is
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 a stage for musicians to live
concert
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concerts
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 to visit
visitor
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visitors
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 during the day.
Furthermore
, there was
a
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one
 glasshouse to the
south east
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south-east
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 and in the
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northeast
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north east
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northeast
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corner
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,corner
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 there was a pond for the
waterplant
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water plant
. Nowadays, pak converted dramatically.
Two
 seating areas at the corner
removed
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 and the left part of the
park
 is done Amphitheatre for concerts. In the middle, Fountain removed and converted
one
 big rose garden surrounded for seats.
One
 entrance added in
south east
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 leads to car
park
 Glasshouse
also
 altered a water feature.
Moreover
, there is a cafe for the visitors
instead
 of
one
 rose garden today.
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