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Some people agree spending lot of money on large wedding while others think it is a waste of money.what is your opinion?

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Introduction
Marraige
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Marriage
 plays a vital role in
every one
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everyone
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 life.Few
indiviuals
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individuals
 pay a huge amount of money and others keep it simple.in my point of view,
wedding
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the wedding
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 should
on
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very
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the very
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 big stage.There are numerous
reason
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reasons
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 to support my stance
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with,the
first
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 and most important thing is providing
employement
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employment
 to thousand of
people
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 who are part of
this
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industry
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.
For instance
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,
Indian
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the Indian
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 wedding
industry
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 is one of the biggest
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industry
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industries
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 in the world.Many
people
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 are associated with
this
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industry
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 like cooks,
goldsmith
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goldsmiths
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,grocery store
owner
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owners
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, lighting
anddecoration
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and decoration
 person etc.
Hence
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,on large
scale
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 it is
bread
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the bread
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 and butter of many families.
In addition
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 to that,
marraige
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marriage
 only happens once in
lifetime
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a lifetime
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 and spending money on it would be of no harm.
Body paragraph 2
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Elaborate
Elabarate
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An elabarate
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 wedding has many more benefits too.It provides the
couples
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couple
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 lifetime memory.
for example
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,
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it
provide
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provides
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opporunity
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opportunity
 for the young
people
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 to enjoy their happiness with friend and
Body paragraph 3
family.
consequently
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, family.
consequently
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,
people
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 spend more wealth to make it memorable.
moreover
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,it brings friends and family closer to each other
Conclusion
To conclude, a marriage is a very special event in one life .It is very essential for promoting social culture and to generate
livelehood
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livelihood
livelihoods
 for many youths

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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