Some people agree spending lot of money on large wedding while others think it is a waste of money.what is your opinion?

Marraige
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Marriage
plays a vital role in
every one
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life.Few
indiviuals
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individuals
pay a huge amount of money and others keep it simple.in my point of view,
wedding
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the wedding
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should
on
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very
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big stage.There are numerous
reason
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reasons
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to support my stance
To begin
with,the
first
and most important thing is providing
employement
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employment
to thousand of
people
who are part of
this
industry
.
For instance
,
Indian
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the Indian
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wedding
industry
is one of the biggest
industry
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industries
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in the world.Many
people
are associated with
this
industry
like cooks,
goldsmith
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,grocery store
owner
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, lighting
anddecoration
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and decoration
person etc.
Hence
,on large
scale
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it is
bread
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the bread
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and butter of many families.
In addition
to that,
marraige
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marriage
only happens once in
lifetime
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and spending money on it would be of no harm.
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Elaborate
Elabarate
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wedding has many more benefits too.It provides the
couples
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lifetime memory.
for example
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it
provide
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opporunity
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opportunity
for the young
people
to enjoy their happiness with friend and family.
consequently
, family.
consequently
,
people
spend more wealth to make it memorable.
moreover
,it brings friends and family closer to each other To conclude, a marriage is a very special event in one life .It is very essential for promoting social culture and to generate
livelehood
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livelihood
livelihoods
for many youths
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