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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences.

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In higher
education
, institutes should accept both genders equally in all kinds of
subject
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.I
am not agree
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 with
this
 idea.
Firstly
, I will
expain
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explain
 why I disagree with
this
 statement with some
example
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 and
secondly
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,secondly
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 I will show some disadvantages of
equallisiom
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equalism
 on all
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subjects
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subjets
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subjects
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.
To begin
 with, in higher
education
 quality is
first
 priority so that most of the university focus on
qualityful
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quality
students
 rather than
gender
. But some people want to see
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the same
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same
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some
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 numbers of male and female
students
 in all subjects, which is not a better idea.
First
 of all, most of the learners want their
favorite
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 subject.
Although
 it
is
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is varied
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vary
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very
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to
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between
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female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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. If any higher
education
 centre
give
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 equal
opptorite
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opposite
 that will be
not
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no
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 fear with good
students
.
For example
, traditionally male
students
 are choose
engineering
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the engineering
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subjet
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subject
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 while
female
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females
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 prefer medical related
subject
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subjects
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. Because they are
expart
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expert
experts
 on their particular interest. Another reason is
,
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 if we give a chance to less
qualityfull
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quality full
students
 for maintaining same numbers of male and female
students
.
As a result
,
altimately
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ultimately
 it will not get a better result after their
graduatation
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graduation
.
Moreover
,
equal
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the equal
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 number is not
mandotary
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mandatory
 in
higher
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higher-level
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level
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levels
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 because
gender
 can not play a big role in
major
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a major
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sector
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sectors
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 of
education
.It is already proved that,
gender
just
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is just
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 a term. It has no
infuence
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influence
 in
education
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the education
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 sector. because at the end of the day we want
qualityfull
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quality full
 doctor, engineer or scientist.
Students
 should get
chance
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a chance
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 by their academic
result
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results
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 or quality. In conclusion, higher
education
centre
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centres
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 should not give chance
accoring
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according
 to genders. In
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the education
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education
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,education
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 sector quality is important rather than
gender
.
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