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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

#students #internet #effects #purposes
There is no doubt that these days
students
 are becoming more dependent on the
internet
. Some people say that the
internet
 for educational purposes is misused and
it
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should be limited. In my
view
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 I totally disagree with
this
 statement. In the forthcoming
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 I am going to explain why I oppose
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, there are several advantages of using the
internet
 for educational purposes. The main reason to support
this
 claim is that it is easier for both teachers and
students
 to communicate. To illustrate, after
the
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school time, and a student wants to ask questions about the homework he can email his teacher and open an online meeting and get his questions answered.
Also
, teachers can send assignments through email and receive them through email as well. Another point worth noting is that teaching on a smartboard is much easier for the teacher and using smart
colorful
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 presentation slides help
students
 understand their lesson faster and more clearly.
Also
, it is very helpful and beneficial when
students
 want to do presentations. In the educational process, the
internet
 is a very powerful tool and has its importance.
Although
 the
internet
 in schools has many negative effects, the positives sides outweigh any negatives if
its
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 used properly. In conclusion, some
students
 may misuse the
internet
. But I completely disagree that the use of the
internet
 for educational purposes should be limited. Indeed, it has advantages and disadvantages. But
still
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 it
play
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 a magnificent role in society by using the
internet
 wisely.
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