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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #interaction #people #society
Social
media
 is popular for communication which is replacing a common interaction like face-to-face.
Personally
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 I think that it has a lot of benefits from using online
communicating
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 while there are
also
 drawbacks but I believe that
advantages
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the advantages
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people
 get from it outweighs
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
To begin
 with, there are several profits
people
 earn from using social
media
 as a way
for
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 interacting with others. It can be seen that applications these days offer more conveniences to contact with another person.
For example
,
Facebook
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the Facebook
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 messenger is
most
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the most
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 famous option for contacting,
people
 who have
an
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internet are able to send their messages to other
people
 easily.
Moreover
, online conferences are offering
people
 who live in different parts of the world to have a meeting through their electronic devices,
such
 as
smart phone
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smartphone
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 and
computer
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computers
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.
Furthermore
, according to the epidemic today, Covid-19 affect
to
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face-to-face activities because there is a measure to have
social-distancing
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social distancing
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,
therefore
,
people
 are not able to meet each other but the online method like zoom application is a choice for many activities,
such
 as education and business meeting.
On the contrary
, there are some drawbacks which are
minor
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a minor
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problem
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problems
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which
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that
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are
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 acceptable and can be fixed easily.
Firstly
,
people
 who are contacting
with
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others
by
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online,
they
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will have less interaction
to
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with
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 another one because social
media
 can not show
a
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 real personality of that person
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with who
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who
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 they are talking with. As the result, they will not be able to know what kind of those
people
 really are.
This
 is a lack of social
media
 in communication which face-to-face has got it. To conclude,
although
 there are some downsides that happen in
online
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 way to
communicating
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communication
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,
but
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the benefits seem to be outweighed according to the illustrated advantages.
Consequently
, it can
bee
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seen
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 that
people
 can earn more benefits than drawbacks from social
media
.
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