Around the world mega cities are now home to an ever larger share of the world’s population. What problems are caused by this shift? What measures can governments take to deal with these issues?

Nowadays, a lot of
people
in the world move to live in the major
cities
because it is convenient.
This
essay will discuss the
problem
caused by
a
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the

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rise of
people
in the
cities
and possible solutions that the governments can cope with
this
problem
.
First
of all, there are several
problems
caused by the increasing population in the main
cities
. One is the traffic congestion that
make
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people
waste their time on roads.
Duo
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to the growth of amount
family
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families

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in the
cities
, they have to buy a new car to use in daily life. If the
amount
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number

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of cars are
increase
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increases

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,
they
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it

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also
caused
the
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air pollution.
That is
why some children and old
people
have the
problem
of their lungs and respiratory tracts. Another
problem
is the
government
cannot tackle all
problems
in the
cities
because they have to look after all the population. Many times they can solve
the
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minor
problems
such
as a bad smell of garbage and contaminated water in the canal.
However
, there are some possible policies that the
government
can provide to
people
in the town.
Firstly
, To deal with the heavy traffic, they need to encourage the
people
to use public transport
instead
of their own car. They can publish the new policy about the cost of using
public
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the public

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transport system or provide
the
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promotions .
For instance
, the Japanese
government
reduced the price of
high speed
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high-speed

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trains to attract more
people
to use the public system and they can decrease the number of cars in main
cities
such
as Osaka and Tokyo.
Moreover
, the
government
has to create a group of assistants that can manage the minor
problem
to cover
people
in the
cities
. In conclusion,
Although
increasing
of
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population in the major town can lead to traffic jams and ineffective ways to remove the minor
problem
, the
government
can publish new policies to solve these
problems
.
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