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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects of this on society and families?

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There is an increasing proportion of people who choose to have a
child
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 at an older age. There are various reasons for
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 trend and
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 has both positive and negative impacts on families and society. Delaying
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childbirth has many positive effects on families and society.
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, people have enough time to collect money for preparing facilities for their
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child
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children
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. People should have some criteria before becoming parents and one of them is financial ability so they can analyze their affordability and if they don’t have enough money for buying milk powder or
diaper
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diapers
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 for their
child
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 it is better to deter having a
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.
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, couples who have marital problems can make their decision whether they want to continue or get divorced. Divorcing parents can cause irreversible effects on their
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 so having a
child
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 later can prevent
children
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 from having a big issue in their life.
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, we can’t overlook the drawbacks. In terms of the downsides of having a
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 later, the most important negative effect is that it can heighten the risk of infertility among mothers and mental and physical problems among
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.
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,
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 may suffer chromosome problems
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 as down syndrome.
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, as the parents delaying their childbirth, they are not as patient as before and they prefer to be in quiet places
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 of hearing their
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’s screams so
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 can lead
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 conflicts between family members. In conclusion, I would argue that
merits
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the merits
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 of having a
child
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 later eclipse the downsides and physical or mental
problem
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problems
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 and preventing
children
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 from family issues are some of its harmful and beneficial impacts.
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