IELTS Writing Correction Service / Writing Samples / Band 4.5 In many countries today, there are concerns about the unhealthy lifestyles that people lead. What health issues are linked to modern lifestyles? What answers to these problems can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer, and support your essay with ideas and examples from your own experience.

Health
concerns are been growing day by day in today's modern world. Folks are too busy nowadays to concentrate on their diet and lifestyles,
thus
leading to physical and mental disorders. There is a myriad of medical problems which are related to the current attitude of life. To mention are a number of solutions and will mention some of the ideas and examples supporting them in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, the primary issue associated with the harmful lifestyle is eating fast food as it is found to be a more convenient option for living is obesity. Being overweight can lead to many serious medical conditions
such
as diabetes, hypertension, hormonal imbalances, etc.
Moreover
, fat
people
are often shy to face society and in turn, become depressed leading to mental disorders.
Secondly
, lack of time to exercise can
also
cause
people
to get older before their actual biological age.
Last
but not the least, lack of proper sleep due to busy routines in today's competitive world can
also
be detrimental to one's body.
For instance
, there was a famous billionaire who use to eat well, exercise but use to sleep only 3 to 4 hours a day which was the main cause for his ill
health
,
consequently
leading to his death. There can be simple solutions that
people
can adopt for better
health
and productive life.
Firstly
, society should buy and consume more locally grown and produced foods, so that it can avoid consuming unhealthy and adulterated food items.
Also
, it is employers responsibility to fix the working hours for the staff so that they can
also
focus on their
health
and take out time to be physically active. Employees should practise healthy habits while at
workplace
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too, by taking frequent breaks and have
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couple of minutes of walking with some stretching movements.
Moreover
,
this
method can alleviate
drawbacks
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of sedentary work. For
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, many companies are now having their personal gym and healthy food cafeteria as
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awareness to stay fit. To conclude,
this
is a grave topic of concern and it cannot be achieved overnight.
Hence
, it requires consistency and sincere effort by being disciplined and conscious about what they are eating and
also
of their routine.
Nevertheless
, it is never too late to make a start and follow and
also
people
must make regular
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with their doctors.
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