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Some individuals think that working from home, while of benefit to employees, is actually a drawback to employers. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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 day and age, some people assume that teleworking is beneficial to
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 but it is completely opposite to
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. From my perspective,
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 are able to take full advantage of working from home.
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 with, the wire technology has opened up variety choices of up-to-date possibilities and options for workers for the purpose of remote working. By using mobile phones, tablets or computers, they can easily access different kinds of information and assist their
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 more efficiently.
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, virtual working gives
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 the ability to
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 at their own pace without being disrupted by any distractions, offline meetings. Another factor that cannot be denied is working from home is less stressful and exhausted than working at the office. Online working is
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 another way to reduce traffic jams and exhaust fume that come from transportations. As
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 and
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 have to
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 at home, there are
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 transports and smoke on the street and it is healthy for the whole community. Mobile
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 is an exquisite choice for salaried workers who desire more income.
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, various online websites can help individuals to earn money by writing comments when listening to new songs or translating passages and emails for companies.
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, disabled
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 choose virtual working mode because it is convenient and more comfortable for them as they cannot go to
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the way normal people do. In conclusion, we cannot deny the fact that teleworking is advantageous for both
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 and
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 and
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 should be promoted.
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