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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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In recent years around the world, the major concern towards the global-warming and one of the major reason for
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 was pollution produces by personal
vechicles
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vehicles
 especially the cars. As per the British transport ministry statistics by
2030
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 there will be around 50 million cars on roads.
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 growth will lead
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 traffic
jam
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 on tiny roads and
airpolution
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air pollution
. To overcome
issue
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 both government and people need to follow alternative
transportation
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.
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easy
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 going to discuss
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 alternative ways.
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individual
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 it's our responsibility to think about our future generations. If we are going to
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pollute
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nature will lead reduction of natural resources like water and pure air.
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, it's a small step from an individual
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perspective
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prospective
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but
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it will make
huge
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 impact to preserve natural resources.
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,
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 of using your own car to
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workplace
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 if you chose bicycle or public
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transportation
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 it will help to preserve natural resources fuel and traffic pollution.
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avoid
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 the need
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 air purifier towers establishment. On other hand, from
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the government
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government
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 they are supposed to establish strong policies towards old cars which
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 producing more carbon dioxide to scrab early.
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, they suppose
encourage
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to encourage
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 people to use public
transportation
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to wards
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towards
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 daily workplaces . There must be a rule to restrict one car for
family
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the family
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instead
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 of
ever
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every
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 individuals ownership. They
supposed
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 to bring
policy
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 with manufacturers to explore
less
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 emission vehicles. In conclusion, to preserve our nature for
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next-generation
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next
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the next
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 generation it's our responsibility to reduce
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car usage. All nations suppose to implement strict laws toward individual
vechicle
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vehicle
 usage at the same they
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 to plan convenient public
transportation
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system
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systems
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 for
hassle free
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hassle-free
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 travel.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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