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Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

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Every country in the world have different cultured and
art
 is the way to introduce the culture. In the present age, many
people
 ignored
art
 and are more focused on science, technology, and business. I think the public who ignored
art
 feel
art
 is not necessary nowadays and to make the public interested in
art
, we can make
art
 more interactive or can make more
money
 from that. We can see that many
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societies
aresocieties
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 more interesting in another thing unless the arts. In my opinion, arts can not make a
lot
 of
money
. How much
money
 does
art
 make? I am sure many communities are asking like that. I think it is about
people
's perspectives and effort.
For example
, many parents said or gave advice to their children to study science, technology, or business because that major is more important, educative, and prestigious. So the children must have thought like that. Many populations think
art
 can not make a
lot
 of
money
.
On the other hand
, if we thought that
art
 is not important, the culture of many countries can fade. We don't know about old songs, old paintings, museums, and history. I think all of
that is
 important too. And in my opinion, the government and citizens are able to make arts more interesting.
For example
,
the
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famous artist can promote their country to another country with their culture, language, food, and many more. So many
people
 think that
art
 can do and make a
lot
 of
money
. They provided that we can think creatively.
Moreover
, many
people
 think it is boring, and we can prove that it is not true and make it real. In conclusion, I think
people
 are not interested in
art
 because
art
 can not make a
lot
 of
money
 and we can not do anything from
art
. To make it more interesting, the government and citizens who love
art
 must work together and make something exciting and prove to who
people
not
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 interested.
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  • Economic growth
  • STEM subjects
  • Job security
  • Financial success
  • Pragmatic
  • Utilitarian pursuits
  • Art education
  • Inclusive
  • Engaging
  • Contemporary society
  • Social issues
  • Environmental themes
  • Digital platforms
  • Virtual museums
  • Interactive art
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