These days the fashions in clothing are constantly changing. Is this affecting individuals and the environment in a positive or a negative way? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

We live in a fast-paced world, where almost everything we wear is out of date in the horizon of months. While some people argue, that clothing has never been cheaper and it is really easy to go with
the
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fashion nowadays, I believe, that
this
kind of mindset negatively influences
milions
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millions
million
of lives all over the globe.
Furthermore
, it has a negative effect on the environment.
To begin
with, the price
for
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cheap clothing is actually high. It includes child labour, inhuman working conditions and
furthermore
, it contributes to
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environmental pollution.
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Unfortunately
,
online
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world does not help to fight
this
problem.
For instance
, on
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Instagram, thousands of
inlfuencers
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influencers
promote clothes and cheap
accesories
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accessories
, which was, in fact, made by
childern
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children
in Asia. These kids work from 12 to
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shifts for less than 50 cents per hour.
Moreover
, the conditions they work in are poor, in India in 2018 whole factory collapsed and
burried
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buried
alive over 50
childern
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children
.
In addition
, colours used to dye fabrics are of
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very low quality and are dangerous for all living creatures. Not only that breathing these chemicals often lead to cancer of the lungs, it has been proven, that it
also
has
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impact on animals. In
China
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in 2015 all living creatures were poisoned when the employees from the low-fashion factory dumped thousands of litres of leftover colouring into the river. Another issue is that at least 50% of everything
that is
produced in Asia is shipped worldwide, which
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extremely
increases the carbon footprint. In
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conclusion
, cheap textile and
accesories
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accessories
is
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not worth the money. In my
opinion
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it is better to invest
into
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sustainable fashion brands where people work in better conditions and non-poisonous colouring is used.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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