Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion

Keeping wild animals in a
zoo
is a controversial issue. While there are some
disagree
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with
this
action, the benefit of having wild
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life
lives
lifes
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lives
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in artificial
environmen
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environment
environments
like zoos
also
have many positive points.
From
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my opinion, I completely agree that zoos can
protecting
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protect
be protecting
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wild animals and
advantages
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the advantages
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of
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the zoo
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zoo
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zoos
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is overtaken the drawbacks.
However
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this
essay will examine both
side
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of
this
issue.
To begin
with,
zoo
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a zoo
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is a good place for scientists to research and prevent
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the animal
an animal
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animal
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animals
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from extinction. The reduction in
amount
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the amount
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of species is a good example of unprotection.
Therefore
, keeping animal from their freedom
seem
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seems
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to be cruel but
this
is necessary evil way. Another benefit is
zoo
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zoos
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inspiring many children. Not like seeing in the book, If children can learn from real experience with
animal
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an animal
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such
as
behavior
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, smell, sound and etc., the importance of the other
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lives
lifes
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lives
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could be
awared
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awarded
aware
. Moving to the fact that
zoo
is not proper
for ever
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forever
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animals.
For example
, the carnivores like Lion and
tiger
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tigers
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have
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the instincts
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instincts
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instinct
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to run and hunt and
as a result
of
peting
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putting
petting
them in a small cage, aggressive
behavior
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behaviour
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is unavoidable. To conclude,
zoo
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the zoo
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can be
the
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place to protect
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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.
However
, stress from
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a limited
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area to
live
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in is
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is consider
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as
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a drawback. The better way to deal with
this
is that zoos must design to have enough space proper
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for
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fro
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for
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each species.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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