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In many countries, women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after the birth of the newborn. Do you think the advantages of maternity leave outweigh the disadvantages?

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Maternity leave during the birth period of a child is a thing potentially
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 for both mother and baby regarding their health and development. I suppose, giving permission to mothers is surely more advantageous compared to its disadvantages. There are many pros that are connected with maternity leave.
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 of all, to protect their safe motherhood, a woman should be rested after the birth of a baby. They should be supported in terms of financial as well as mental satisfaction.
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, if a mother can get proper rest and adequate economical support during the leave, definitely, they will take care of themselves more and feel stress-free from their workplace.
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, they will take nutritional supplements sufficiently to keep the baby’s health all right.
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, with less stress in their daily life, they can be strong enough psychologically in between their leave and rejoining.
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, some drawbacks that cannot be avoided while the women stay in their homes as off-worker. They can be humiliated in their workplace after their return and the authority may fall into a dilemma because of the insufficient amount of workers in that specific area. Apart from
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, the employers may have an extra option
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 of the rested mothers which in result them to cost more irrelevant spending that negatively impacts the whole authority. In conclusion, in the case of maternal leave after the birth of a baby, the merits of their leave outweigh the demerits and I support the maternity leave anyway.
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