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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #lives #change
Modification is essential for everyone in performing the day to day activities but many consider spending their
lives
 carrying out similar tasks on a daily and restrain from change. In my opinion, I prefer
change
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,
although
 I will discuss both aspects in the following paragraphs. Many ought to stabilize their
lives
 by sticking to
one
 particular task for a long period of time. In
regarding
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to
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this
, people consider working in the same job constantly in order to avoid losing their position as an employer, manager and other roles. Thereby, restricting themselves from a variety of new opportunities that might be awaiting on their way.
In addition
 to that,
one
 is only satisfied enough with what they have and do not bother undertaking new risks,
for instance
, from being an employee to commencing a new business of their own.
On the other hand
, changes in
lives
 are vital, even though
one
 may not see the benefits to it.
Such
 advantages include
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 a wide range of new opportunities and skills to learn from and explore many other various talents
one
 has.
Furthermore
, leaving
one
's comfort zone to participate in a numerous number of activities leads to growth and overcome the impossible, whereby taking on challenges and risks develops
one
's state of fear into becoming the
strengths
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.
Although
,
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 is daunting, challenges shape up the
lives
 of people and promote steady growth. In conclusion, I believe that change is essential due to the different opportunities and skills that exist today for
one
 to climb in the field of success.
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  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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