Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Modification is essential for everyone in performing the day to day activities but many consider spending their
lives
carrying out similar tasks on a daily and restrain from change. In my opinion, I prefer
change
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,
although
I will discuss both aspects in the following paragraphs. Many ought to stabilize their
lives
by sticking to
one
particular task for a long period of time. In
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this
, people consider working in the same job constantly in order to avoid losing their position as an employer, manager and other roles. Thereby, restricting themselves from a variety of new opportunities that might be awaiting on their way.
In addition
to that,
one
is only satisfied enough with what they have and do not bother undertaking new risks,
for instance
, from being an employee to commencing a new business of their own.
On the other hand
, changes in
lives
are vital, even though
one
may not see the benefits to it.
Such
advantages include
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a wide range of new opportunities and skills to learn from and explore many other various talents
one
has.
Furthermore
, leaving
one
's comfort zone to participate in a numerous number of activities leads to growth and overcome the impossible, whereby taking on challenges and risks develops
one
's state of fear into becoming the
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Although
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is daunting, challenges shape up the
lives
of people and promote steady growth. In conclusion, I believe that change is essential due to the different opportunities and skills that exist today for
one
to climb in the field of success.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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