Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and apes together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
The way of bringing
people
together from different cultures all around the world and various age groups could be through music
, as thought
by some Correct your spelling
though
people
. I completely agree with this
idea because of several reasons.
In this
world, there are people
who belong to different communities and have their unique music
style
and cultures. If Fix the agreement mistake
styles
people
from a particular community meet other people
in this
world through music
, then
this
could be sign
of friendship and love and bringing them together. Add an article
a sign
For instance
, one of friend
who lives in India met a person living in France when he posted his review on French pop Add an article
a friend
music
band on Twitter. Through this
, both of them could exchange their thoughts and ideas and thereby became long distance
friends. The French guy was introduced to Add a hyphen
long-distance
the
classical Correct article usage
apply
hindi
Change the capitalization
Hindi
music
and my friend started even liking more French music
.
In the current scenario, youngsters prefer listening to those music
genres which are currently trending and are never aware of the retro, old, traditional songs. It’s obvious that everyone has their choice, but if they once listen to the
old Correct article usage
apply
music
, maybe then
they won’t regret missing out something
precious. Change preposition
on something
Furthermore
, if younger
generation Correct article usage
the younger
start
loving old Change the verb form
starts
music
, Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct your spelling
then
this
could bring people
with older generations more
closer to them. Change the word
apply
This
situation particularly happens in India.
To conclude, music
does bring people
of different age groups and generations together by sharing their opinions about their music
style and also
by getting introduced to retro and old music
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite