The crime rate nawadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the past criminal was so high, but in recent

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problem with many methods. I firmly agree that high

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the crime rate in the future.

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with, criminal in the past without CCTV was hard for policemen.

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, when you doing something wrong with far from other sights in 30 years ago, so they don't have any evidence to prove and take you to jail, but

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era we can prove that from CCTV in the shopping mall or street or restaurants.

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, did something wrong will be caught by CCTV forever.

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, terrorists across the countries are easier to find than in the past. The reason why

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technology

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they have some programme to track the terrorist if they escaping from country to country,

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will help while they entering to new places as information will send to immigration to aware

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person with red light.

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number of users in the

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vital information to the police. Because of

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just daily life applications but much helpful. In conclusion,

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has come to help people not only in criminal but,

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makes people life easier than in the past. I think in the future will be more influences

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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