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"By investing in tourism we can earn a lot of revenue and growth in national economy. At the same time it destroys the local culture. What is your opinion?" Give your opinion in no less than 250 words.

Tourism is one of the biggest industries worldwide. It has grown, especially over the
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 few decades, by leaps and bounds.
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 is happening because the global citizen now takes even the slightest of chances to visit
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uncharted territory. So, all the countries are eager to invest more and more in it. It has its rich rewards, but there are drawbacks too. At the forefront of all demerits of exploration is the impact on local perception. Still, in my opinion,
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 demerits cannot outweigh the benefits of the industry. In the modern ,age the experience of one country or society is open for all to observe and take part in. When incoming tourists get in touch with a local civilization they do not necessarily destroy it. It is understandable that they leave a bit of their own cultural identity in the place they have visited. But
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 a healthy demonstration of cultural mixing
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 happening incessantly all over the world in other ways too, e.g. international media.
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, if we miss out on the far-reaching benefits of the touristry industry being foolishly bogged down by the illusionary ghouls of cultural destruction, we are only
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. In ,reality travel does not taint a local ability, rather it fortifies it.
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visiting places do not only sight-see but want to experience the diverse heritage and customs
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. So, since destroying or transforming the local art only makes a locality less attractive to spectators, travel provides ample motivation to preserve our cultural identity.
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, we must declare touristry as a boon that encourages the peoples of the world to be themselves, not like
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others,
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 rewarding those who have valued and glorified their fashion in terms of much-needed revenue.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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