In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I don’t agree that a developed nation should pay for the healthcare
provision
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of its
aging
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population, as
this
will lead to bankruptcy for that nation. Even though there are many advantages to providing free
health
care
for every citizen,
such
as protecting the
health
of poor
people
, the current
health
care
system is too expensive to provide it without charge to everyone as they grow old in the future. As
countries
become more highly developed in their economies and social support systems, families have fewer children and the population as a whole begins to age. There is an economic reason for
this
trend, in that rural and
agricultural based
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economies require a lot of farm or factory labour, and having many children can prove to be an economic advantage as their wages often contribute to their family’s wealth. Because these
countries
have lower GDP’s, they can only afford basic
health
services for their
people
, and whether it is free or requires payment, there is usually a sufficient base of productive workers who are earning money and paying taxes to pay for their
health
care
systems. The problem lies with developed
countries
whose
health
care
systems are more technologically complex and whose personnel are more highly trained and paid.
This
leads to a prohibitively expensive
care
system in these developed
countries
with low birthrates and a much smaller pool of workers paying taxes to pay for the
health
care
of large numbers of aged
people
who are retired and not contributing to the tax base. In
this
situation, the country will soon find healthcare costs spiralling out of control while at the same time the number of workers paying taxes decreases.
In addition
, older
people
usually have more
health
problems and longer hospital stays, which only compounds the entire problem for rich
countries
with
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populations. The obvious solution to
this
problem is to reduce the need for a
health
care
system in the
first
place. Many poor and underdeveloped
countries
don’t have many western-style hospitals because they have
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healers who use herbal remedies and therapies that they can afford. The overall
health
of these nations, as long as they are not at war or suffering from a natural disaster, is often better than that of developed
countries
when counting rates of cancer, heart disease, which are the leading causes of death in the developed world.
This
trend can
also
be attributed to a less polluted environment in these mostly pre-industrial societies, as well as healthier diets and more physical activity. Industrial societies could practice preventative medicine, including eliminating
junk-food
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and encouraging physical fitness, to increase the
health
of their populations and achieve savings.
Also
, if developed
countries
returned to natural healing and remedies
instead
of technological ones they could greatly reduce the costs involved and easily afford to provide free
care
for everyone.
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