Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

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n various nations around the world, many
people
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suggest that high school pupils should take part in
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unpaid
community
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services
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,
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, working for a charity, improving
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neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children. It is undeniable that the young children who make a contribution to the
community
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are highly respect
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and admired by
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society. In
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essay,
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will evaluate the several
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why
community
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services
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should be carried out by the youth. There are a great number of doing charity to the society, especially the program is carried out by the young generation. One of the most significant is they can build
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interpersonal skills among themselves.
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is because the majority of youth nowadays are engaging with their gadget throughout the day and night, so, there is no space for them to interact with others. By launching
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an unpaid community service
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community
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services
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, they can directly learn
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social skills,
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tolerate
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, discipline, partnership and so many.
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,
these activity
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will
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them to become a wide picture
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in the future.
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, they will understand the value of
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and
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of happiness in
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. Admittedly
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can't buy happiness,
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, without
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people
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will
be suffer
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for
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survive
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.
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, not every single thing can be defined by
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.
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, give priority to the
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people
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in the queue, help old
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crossed the road, or help old
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carry their stuff, these actions can actually make that person happy for the whole day.
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, they will realize that provides
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unpaid services
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services
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to the public is worthy.
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, moral values can be implanted
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the
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early young age,
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extremely
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to the person as well as society.
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good conduct
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highly
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by the employer as well as colleagues, so the chance to get employed is high. Undoubtedly every
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likes to mingle with
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positive
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as compared to negative
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, so these categories of
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will be likeable by the public and
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the
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others joy.
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, their life will be
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and less stressful. To sum up,
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strongly agree that unpaid
community
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services
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should be conducted by the young generation in order for them to release the mercy of the world as well as bring the country to prosperity.
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that, the standard of living
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will be increased
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid community service
  • compulsory part
  • high school programs
  • sense of duty
  • social responsibility
  • essential life skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • leadership
  • work experience
  • employable
  • community improvement
  • local community
  • time management
  • empathy
  • compassionate attitude
  • diversion from academics
  • critics argue
  • varying quality
  • inconsistency
  • students’ experiences
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