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Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes of this? What are the effects of this on individuals and on the society?

#people #time #home #effects #individuals #society
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In the current scenario,
people
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 usually spend lesser
time
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 at
home
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.There may be several reasons behind it and it
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person
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 to
person
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; like
people
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 who are introverts are comfortable staying
home
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,while
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 doesn't happen in
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the case
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 of extroverts.
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 has
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 caused an effect on the individual itself as well as on
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society
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.
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,
poeple
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people
 who are working in private/public organizations are always busy with their work and do not have enough
time
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 for
them
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themselves
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 as well as
to
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for
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the
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society
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. They are engrossed with many meetings, presentations, outdoor visits and their clients.
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, they spend most of their
time
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 in the office and do not return
home
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 early. Sometimes, they need to work overtime and
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 cuts down their available free
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.
Secondly
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, individuals who are single or divorced prefer spending their
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 hanging out with friends or their colleagues.
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, my friend had a divorce two years back and being the only
person
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 living
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home
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at home
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,spends most of the
time
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 with his friends living in his locality.
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, there are more events,concerts and happenings in today's
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 compared to a decade before, so
people
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 like to be there in their leisure
time
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. These might be the possible reasons why
people
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 nowadays spend
time
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 outside. With
people
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 being outdoors most of the
time
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,
this
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 may affect them and
the
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society
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 in many ways. Individuals who have kids and
family
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families
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 may be affected by
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. They don't have enough
time
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 to talk with their children and
rest
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the rest
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 of the family members.
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, my father works abroad and his location and our's has a
time
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 difference. We do not get enough
time
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 to talk to him because
his
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he's
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 working hours
clashes
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clash
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 with our free
time
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.
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 affects me since
i
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I
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 cannot share my daily life incidents and thoughts with him. Another detrimental effect it causes is that these
people
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 who are busy tend to have less
time
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 on discussions with the
society
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 meetings which are concerned about overall
developement
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development
 and events.These could be the effects on the
people
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 and
the
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society
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 as a whole. To conclude, spending less
time
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 at
home
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 has caused
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many
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may
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many
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effects
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effect
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 on
the
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society
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 and
also
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 on the
person
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. These reasons and effects have been discussed in
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