Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

There
are
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increased
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population in the cities these days, which lead to problems
about
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transportation
in many countries. I certainly agreed that government should pay attention about
develop
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public
transportation
such
as
Railways
more than building roads. Developing
railways
to become systems that
easy
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to use. The main reason is It will stimulate citizens to use public
transportation
more than
private
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car
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. There are many advantages
about
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using
railways
as public
transportation
.
For example
, traffic jam is decreased as
private
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car
is decreased.
Moreover
, pollution
was slightly fall
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due to emissions gas from cars is decreased. It will decrease in accidental rate. And the main advantages is saving
costs
to maintain
car
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,petrol prices, and
car
insurance. Another reason is for
tourists
,
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are not booking the organization to tour in
this
city.
Railways
system is easy to approach, so
tourists
could plan to go everywhere by themselves. There are many advantages for
tourists
.
For instance
,
tourists
know about
a
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costs
per trip so they can decide trip
plan
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plans
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to save
costs
. They must be sure that it is not cheated the
costs
compared with
traveling
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by taxi. The main reason is
connected
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city with a good
railway
system, which will promote tourism.
On the other hand
, in my opinion,developing public
transportation
is not about
railway
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,
government
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the government
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should pay attention in any public
such
as roads,
bus
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, and fury. In conclusion, developed countries have
a
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great public
transportation
so people always use
railway
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than
private
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car
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cars
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. Not only citizens
was
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convenient from
railway
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the railway
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but
also
tourists
.
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