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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 believe that it is better to avoid
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 and do the same tasks.
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, others argue that
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 will bring several benefits to humankind and it will create a positive impact
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people
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's
lives
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. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached. On the one hand, it is widely accepted that living in the comfort zone makes
people
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 feel safe.
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, avoiding
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 does not require any effort to do new things. Since, in order to be the better person or good at something, it means that one has to push a lot of efforts to improve oneself.
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, to gain new skills
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 as presentation skills or communication skills,
people
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 have to spend time to practice.
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, doing the same is better than changing in some aspects.
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, traditional cultures should be better preserve as same as
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 used to be so that the new generations could learn and understand their ancestors'
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.
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, others believe that changing will drive the world towards to digital era and bring us new cutting-technology making our
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 more comfortable.
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, emerging of the internet affects all
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 globally, as connecting and interacting with other
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 are convenient.
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, more business firms shifted the way of doing business from locally to globally, which led to better services and products.
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, sometimes changing could bring a negative impact to some
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 or businesses.
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, due to inventing smartphones, Blackberry had to shut down. In conclusion, both doing the same things and changing have benefits and drawbacks.
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 should keep doing the same for traditional cultures
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 while seeking
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 to discover and invent things to making our
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 better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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